I’m working for a company where the boss is the total opposite of an EGALITARIAN. He’s giving all the promotions to the male figures in the business, and is treating them with more respect than the women. Other than that he was a huge CHAUVINIST. He likes women as friends, but then when it comes to hiring them for positions he had a hard time. It was his birthday a few days ago, I forgot to wish him one. I felt obligated to wish him a BELATED birthday. I work at a company where we have to ANIMATE videos. Before my dad passed away I saw him giving life and motion to objects that came to his mind. As soon as I saw how much joy it brought him I thought I should give it a try. As soon as I sat down I instantly fell in love and knew this was what I wanted to do for my life. This job is also made easy because I am AMBIDEXTROUS. This makes editing easier because I can use both hands to edit, instead of one. Most people have a dominant hand in which they do everything with. which mostly a person can only use one. Every day when I come into work I see my boss’s cat Henry KNEADING a blanket that is set up right at the front door. He’s basically the welcoming party for whenever you enter the office. I hate when my co-workers feel the need to show off their OSTENTATIOUS materialistic things. I feel there’s no need to show off a material just to make a point. The way my peers act you must think we live like Kings and Queens in an EDIFICE. Sometimes I feel that I just can’t take working their anymore. The last straw for me was when my boss told me about a job opportunity that made it seem perfect for me. It left that he dangled a carrot in from of me and ripped it away. They were talking me up about it and in the end, they ended up giving it to my co-worker Brandon. He completely felt the need to DELUDE me. I gave my boss my resignation letter and left. Looking back I wish I went totally BERSERK on them. They didn’t deserve for me to be nice to them. I decided to be the bigger person and leave quietly.
Kevin was a very young boy; he is eleven years old. Kevin was a very kind and polite child. He always used his manners whenever guests were over or just at a family dinner. Kevin loved his parents more than everything and his parents treated him like he was everything. His parents were extremely wealthy and humble with their money . But they did spend it how they like as well, they lived in a big EDIFICE. And sometimes Kevin's father Joseph would act a little OSTENTATIOUSLY when around other wealthy people. He loved to DELUDE them into thinking he was snobby like them but he really wasn't by wearing flashy clothes like Gucci and Prada. Furthermore he would always have a giant stack of money on him. But he was never like this at home, he would wear casual clothes usually made by gap. He did this because as a child he wasn't very popular when he was a child. All he want is the satisfactory of having friends. Joseph traveled a lot because of his job. This made it very difficult to spend time with his family but he did try his best. Kevin loved to play tennis .He was very good at it .He wasn't like other people at the tennis courts he was very skilled and was AMBIDEXTROUS with both of his hands which made it very hard for opponents to counter his hits. He had an amazing powerful hit .Kevin loved helping his parents with everything and his birthday was coming up, and he wanted to help make his cake. He helped KNEAD the dough and bake it and decorate it. For his birthday he wanted new cleats and a soccer ball. But his father was away in Germany. His parents both agreed they would get him different things his mom would get him cleats and his father would get his a new ball. He got the cleats he asked for but his father was in Germany so he would give his present on his BELATED birthday. Joseph planned on coming home on his birthday but his flight back to Tampa, Florida . Frustrated, he went BERSERK when he found out he wouldn't be there for his son's 12th birthday. Kevin understood the situation his father was in and didn't take it personally. Needless to say he had a great day with his friends. Kevin was very interested in our society and culture he loved how people came together promoting EGALITARIAN rights and fighting for such thing. It would ANIMATE him and bring joy into his day.
Genesis is a woman who lives in Alaska. Her birthday week was approaching and her friends wanted to do something for her. She wasn’t able to celebrate her birthday on her actual birthday day because she had to finish ANIMATING things for her job but, her friends decided to throw her a BELATED birthday party in Hawaii. They wanted it to be a surprise so they DELUDED her saying they were going to take her out for dinner but they brought her to the airport. When they got to Hawaii there was an EDIFICE that said “Welcome to the Aloha state”. There was a local man KNEADING fresh dough which caused the place to smell like raw dough. They could tell he was AMBIDEXTROUS because he was using both hands to write down orders. Randomly, a BERSERK guy came up to them and was chanting about how he was a CHAUVIST. Genesis was furious because he was scaring her best friends. Genesis then jumped on the guy because she is an EGALITARIAN. She goes to rallies once every month. When all that was over, She noticed an OSTENTATIOUS mark on her shoulder that will stay permanent on her shoulder to remind her of her crazy birthday week.
One day there was a little boy named Charlie. He was a nice little boy who lived in california with his father and Grandfather. Charlie went to school one day and he got bullied by some 9th graders. When his father found out charlie was getting bullied he almost went BERSERK. Charlie had some special skills he thought that was very important he was AMBIDEXTROUS. Charlie could write with both his left and right hand. Charlie always uses his right hand to KNEAD the dough for his father's pizza restaurant. The only thing he didn't like at the restaurant is the dishwasher. People say he acts like a chauvinist pig. He thinks that women are inferior to men. Also the guys name is Pedro and he DELUDES everybody. Charlie has a sister named Jody. Her birthday was 2 days ago and he forgot to tell her happy birthday. When Charlie seen her he wished her a happy BELATED birthday. But after work Charlie took his sister to a EDIFICE, and then he took her to a museum with a OSTENTATIOUS art display. On their way back home they stopped at a ice cream shop owned by their grandparents. But when Charlie looked by the road he saw a dead bird. Since he studys a type of magic that involves bringing dead things back to life. So he picked up the dead bird and started saying some words;and finally he ANIMATED the bird. He brought the bird back to life. Later on that night their parents took them to a protest. The protest involves giving equal rights to everybody. The president made a speech and it gave EGALITARIAN. Then they all went home and partied all night and fell asleep.
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There once was a young man who lived in Scotland. His home was an EDIFICE. Most people believed it was a palace, but no king lived there. Only George lived there, who was CHAUVINIST and believed only female could be his maids. George was a very rich and every one in the town didn’t like him because he was OSTENTATIOUS. Always showing off his expensive items. He was also very depressed and lonely One day, a women named Mary heard about George and his beliefs on women. Mary was an EGALITARIAN. She wanted everyone to be equal. So one day she went out to George’s house with a few of her friends to protest George. One of George’s maids was KNEADING the bread dough before baking it, when she noticed Mary. The maid informed George about the intruders and he went BERSERK. He ran out to the gate at the end of this driveway with a bat and started to hit the gate to make Mary and her friends leave. The next day, Mary goes back to George’s home but this time she doesn’t protest. She thinks she change George’s beliefs. After awhile of talking, George DELUDES Mary into giving him her phone number to talk more but really he wants to ask her on a date. Later that day, George calls Mary and asks her to go to dinner but she says no. This makes George really upset. After a few days, George sees Mary at the market and he asks her why she didn’t want to go to dinner. She tells him that she couldn’t go because it was her birthday and she has family in town. George feels bad that he didn’t know this information, so he wishes her a BELATED birthday. Mary thanks him and says that she can go to dinner that night. George and Mary talk for a very long time over dinner. He learns that she is AMBIDEXTROUS, which made her the best player on her softball since she could pitch with both hands. Every since their date people begin to notice George becomes more humble and ANIMATED and people began to like him more. They say love can brighten someone’s day.
It all began with a young boy named Thaddius. Thaddius hated Donald Trump and what he would say about women, he called Trump a CHAUVINIST that just lived in his luxurious penthouse EDIFICE. So, Thaddius began his adventure of visiting Trump by climbing to the top of his shiny, golden OSTENTATIOUS tower. As he began his long journey he was thinking to himself, “I’m honestly not sure why I’m going to visit Trump, It’s not really for the EGALITARIAN protests.” Thaddius continued to ponder but changing faces he thought, “I sort of just want myself a nice perfect pie of pizza and be able to watch them KNEAD the dough too, that’s my favorite part!!” And, Thaddius could tell he was getting closer to Trump and his guarded New York City because he could smell the stringy, melted cheese of the fabled one dollar slices of pizza but Thaddius didn’t want just a slice he wanted the biggest pizza in town! He adventures to a place called Pizza Barn and got his monster slice, he even had to use his AMBIDEXTROUS skills and use both hands! As he began to climb Trump’s massive tower he sent a text to his pal Trump saying, “Coming, bro! You’re at the Trump Tower’s in NYC right?” But, Trump being Trump didn’t respond. Once he reached the top nobody was there, Thaddius was confused he thought he was BELATED but when he checked his phone again Trump responded with, “Nah fam, sorry to DELUTE you my dude.” Thaddius was so angry he went all that way to see Trump but he wasn’t there! Thaddius then went BERSERK and threw pizza he brought for Trump to try all over the windows. In the end, Thaddius won because he made millions from a cartoon he ANIMATED about this adventure!
My elbows rest of my windowsill as I stare out at the morning sun. It must’ve been early, but I’ve been awake for a while now. Ciel, my blue parakeet, tweets at me from his cage, obviously wanting breakfast. I stretch my arms as I prepare to get up, but stop when I hear the trapdoor entrance to my room burst open. “Aspen! Get up, get up!” As my cousin shouts this, she hurtles herself at my waist, knocking me right into my window. Her small face buries itself into my shoulder, hands clinging to my sweatshirt. “You have to get up right now!” “Cindy, you have to be more careful with Aspen, he might get hurt.” I hear Rachel’s call down from the ladder. Cindy pouts, her glasses falling down her nose. I chuckle and call back. “I’m fine, thank you!” I return to looking at Cindy, her face ANIMATING as she clings to my waist; her light brown hair is pulled into pigtails and her hands are still clutching my sweatshirt. “What’s got you so excited today?” Cindy gets excited by the smallest of things, being eight and all, but usually she’s not as physical. “Why aren’t you excited Aspen? It’s your birthday! Mama said she’s making pancakes!” Oh, yeah, that is a reason to be excited. With everything that’s happened in the past few months, I completely forgot. I’m glad Rachel remembered, because it would be very awkward to have a BELATED birthday party for me, especially when I’ve been here for almost 2 months. I guess I’m 15 now. I feel old. “I’m always very excited in the morning, Cindy.” I say as I push her head away. She pops back and nods, and I rub my eyes. I’ve been trying to get up early, for top secret classified reasons. “I know, Mama says you’ve been getting up early to get ready for school.” My head jerks to face Cindy, wondering how she could have known this top secret information. Wait, how did Rachel know? “Mama said you’re really responsible, so I guessed that you were already getting ready. Also, this is the first time your going to high school, right?” I swear, Cindy is a superhuman. Not only is she really good at thinking about things, which is something I need to work on, she’s also AMBIDEXTROUS. I’ve seen her switch her pencil between hands while she does work, and I think I choked. That’s how you know she’s a mutant. I don’t know why she thinks I’m responsible, though. “Well, as an older cousin, I must set a good example for you.” Maybe I’ll try to play into this ‘responsible’ image she thinks I have. Maybe she hasn’t picked up on the fact that I stopped using my crutches solely on the fact that I didn’t like how the straps looked. “You also get up to watch the boy across the street start his jog.” She says this fact so innocently, yet I end up choking on nothing. I have many questions. First things first, how? How she knows this, how she knows that the cute boy across the street starts exercising really early, how she knows that that is the main reason why I get up. Whatever, Cindy is an omnipotent goddess who doesn’t need explanation. She probably woke up really early from a nightmare and she went to check on me. I learned that she does that by waking up with a child’s face breathing right near my bed. I think I died that night. “You think he’s handsome, right?” Cindy is too smug for her own good. I leap off of my bed into a crouch, bringing my hands up to my face in claws. “While he may be handsome, I actually want to eat him, like how I’m going to eat you!” Cindy shrieks as she bolts off my bed in the opposite direction of me, grabbing a pillow and holding it as a shield. “Oh no you don’t! I will destroy you before you go BERSERK you monster!” She throws the pillow she was holding, and it hits me in the face. It doesn’t hurt because she’s a third grader, but it does knock me into my desk. Living in an attic means that there’s not a lot of space, and the adults keep bumping their heads on the ceiling. Luckily I am not an adult, because I don’t know how to do taxes.
“Alright, you two, stop horsing around and get down here! I couldn’t get a day off, so I wanna see you before I go.” Both Cindy and I perk up, and she makes her way down the ladder that connects my room to the rest of the house. I take a second to give Ciel some attention and food, since he’s a very good birdie, and I jump through the trap door to the next floor. Rachel was waiting at the stairs to the first floor, Cindy was already downstairs through sheer adrenaline at the thought of pancakes. “Aspen, you have to stop jumping like that, you just got out of therapy.” I smile while shrugging. She sighs and makes her way downstairs to the dining room, and I can tell she’s frustrated about something. “Hey, are you okay?” I ask, and she sighs, placing a plate in front of me, and she sits down next to me. Cindy is too busy trying to make her pancakes a face to pay attention. “Yeah, I’m just frustrated. My manager is making me work today because he thinks I don’t deserve the promotion I just got because of how many days I was out.” She scoffs, continuing to rant, “He’s just a CHAUVINIST, I guess, because he never treats the other cooks like this. He tells me my job is KNEADING bread when I went to college for this. It’s not like the restaurant is an EDIFICE or anything, but he treats it like people are coming to Lake Placid specifically for the restaurant.” She puts her head on the table, obviously discontent. “That’s not cool, I mean, you have the same education as everyone else, right? It’s not right for him to treat you differently for any reason.” She chuckles, and ruffles my hair. “Being an EGALITARIAN is a great thing to be, sweetie. Some people just don’t think of things like that.” Rachel stands up to make some coffee, and she continues, “Well, let’s not start this morning on a depressed note, now. Cindy told me you’ve been getting up early.” Oh no. I know where this is going. “Rachel, we don’t need to talk about that right now-” she cuts me before I can continue. “Y’know, I could introduce you to him. Cindy’s friends with his little sister.” I glare at Cindy, who by now is finally done with eating. She smugly smirks as I put my head in my hands. “I wish you were attracted to more OSTENTATIOUS people, though. Abriel’s nice but he probably won’t be able to pay your medical bills anytime soon.” “Hey! You can’t make me DELUDE rich people just so you won’t have to pay bills.” Rachel jokes about this, but I really feel bad about having her spend so much on me. She laughs, and comes back with two mugs of coffee, one for herself and one for me. “I’m only joking sweetie, you know I don’t mind. Happy birthday, Aspen.” She smiles sweetly, as Cindy giggles and jumps up to get something from the kitchen. Rachel whispers, “Although, I really could introduce you two. Abriel is a really nice-” “Rachel!”
Rain drizzled down on the world. Soaking every EDIFICE and building around Berlin. The building was so enormous, people wondered who could possibly live inside it. He was a wealthy CHAUVINIST, who hired only men for his ANIMATION studios, they made cartoon characters and brought them to life in tv show.. EDT Studios was the biggest, richest, and most powerful studio in all of Berlin. Only one man stood in his way, he was young, bright, AMBIDEXTROUS, he could use two hands and was an egalitarian, who believed that everyone should have equal rights. One day at one of the chauvinists many OSTENTATIOUS gatherings, where he would show off his wealth and power to the world, the egalitarian was there with thousands of protesters ready to peacefully combat his ideals. The believe the chauvinist wanted to DELUDE or trick them into his way of thinking. He went on about how he learned his ideals from a jewish baker who loved to KNEAD dough into different shapes and sizes in his free time. And as the people started to support him more as he continued to speak the egalitarian went BERSERK and started flipping out at the crowd. His speech was now BELATED, and he hated being late on things. The chauvinist had won first the first time and the egalitarian was not pleased.
Benny D JR. was a nice young lad that lived in an edifice. He loved how big it was because he needed a different room for each different operator he used in R6. When it came to R6 though, he was a chauvinist. He hated using the girl operators. He only used the guys. When it came to his materialistic life though, he was very ostentatious. He had a chrome wrapped Ferrari 458 Spider, cheetah printed lambo, and a whole closet filled with Supreme and Bathing Ape. Ironically, he can't even drive yet. He’s only 16. You might be wondering, “Why will, how’d he get all his money?” Well you see, Benny D JR was an egalitarian and when he didn’t see people get treated equally, he went full berzerk and destroyed anything and everything in sight. Someone one day decided to film it an post it on youtube and he instantly became a living meme alongside the ambidextrous guy who can write super fast with both hands and Daniel with his white vans. Benny got so mad one day that he got 3 weeks in jail for trying to delude an officer. One day he smashed a huge tv at a bar that he wasn’t even allowed to be in and when the officers tried to cuff him he tried to delude them and was acting like it wasn’t him. Benny D JR likes to bake bread too. One time though, when he was mixing the dough he lost his Gucci ring and from that moment on he swore never to knead dough with jewlerly on. His worst temper tantrum was when he received a letter 3 weeks after his birthday from his friend saying happy belated birthday. His whole house was destroyed except for hi Jӓger room because he locks it for reasons like this. In that room next to the memorial for Jӓger’s acog, is his editing pc on which he’s been making an animation for the past 4 months. He’s been trying to get a show on cartoon network but we’ll see what happens if he gets rejected from that.
Who is Daniel? The part with the officer doesn't fit. He's 16 This should be in multiple paragraphs Why do you have a memorial for an acog? That doesn't make sense. It's an advanced combat optical gunsight! Your plot is all over the place! 18/20
The EDIFICE stood over the forest, its extravagant architecture shining in the sun, fountains dotting the emerald green courtyard in front of it. “Happy birthday, Abby,” my mom said, staring out the window of the plane as we started to descend. It was beautiful. The trip was my BELATED birthday present, because as my birthday was only a week before summer vacation, we decided to wait to make the trip. It was worth it. In this state the ocean could DELUDE someone into thinking that its depths were ANIMATED, as the sunlight danced on the waves, making it look alive. Then the plane touched down on the runway, and the sight of the ocean was obscured by the large mansion that we would be staying at for the next week. The first feelings of nervousness started to flutter in my stomach. It was my grandmother’s house, but I really only knew her name, and that she was an EGALITARIAN, which was why my CHAUVINISTIC dad couldn’t come. I didn’t need their constant arguing anyway, since my grandmother would stand up for everybody and talk about equal rights, and my dad would just be racist for a whole seven days. Don’t get me wrong, I’m all for equal rights, but that’s a bit much. Of course, this is all just guesswork, considering I’ve never actually met her; I’d compiled some articles about her before we came, and while she doesn’t seem to be OSTENTATIOUS in them, her showy house would suggest otherwise, and I’m already rethinking what little I know about her. Half an hour later we’d thanked the pilot (that flew us here in my grandmother’s personal plane) and started the walk back to the house, dragging our luggage behind us. When we reached the house, she was in the kitchen waiting for us, KNEADING dough for bread until it was shaped perfectly. From the smell, one loaf was already in the oven, giving the place the smell of home. This is what my mom makes, I realized suddenly. However, that epiphany did nothing to dispel the awkwardness as I stood there, feeling like I was intruding into someone’s home. Both women seemed to realize it too, as my mom introduced me to her mom and then suggested we find our rooms. And of course, being me, as I rounded the corner, I ran right into a stranger. I didn’t even have time to think about it as she then got pushed into a table, which unfortunately had an expensive looking vase on it. And I watched, almost in slow motion, as the vase flew off the table. But to my surprise, and luck, she caught it with lightning quick reflexes before it could shatter. I briefly wondered if she was AMBIDEXTROUS, since she caught it with her left hand but had a pencil tucked over her right ear, which made it look as if she had equal skill level with both hands. My curiosity quickly faded however as the look of shock morphed into anger on her face. I thought she was going to go BERSERK and throw something at me, but the anger faded in under a second into a neutral look that I couldn’t quite read. This was going to be an interesting week.
Once upon a time there was this boy name Benny D Sr. He was a good kid. As a child he always had a smile on his face and was always nice to people.He was also creative. This one time he went to his cousin’s house after the day of her birthday. He told her happy BELATED birthday and made a ANIMATED cartoon for her It was a cool cartoon that was made. It’s like he almost perfect he’s AMBIDEXTROUS it’s crazy how he can use both hands for everything.When I saw him we went out to the grocery store and buy things to make pizza.Benny said we should KNEAD the dough and make it by scratch and it was fun my first time I ever made pizza.When he got older he wanted to grow up and start a buisness and he said he won’t let women work that because they can’t handle it so he CHAUVINIST.He believed in EGALITARIAN he believes that thing between people should be equal but he wouldn’t risk for women to do heavy equipment work he would have to be in the office.He was just telling me how he would run things.His mom would go BERSERK if he doesn’t follow after his dad footsteps.His dad was a Lawyer for criminal justice and retired Ten years ago.Now they want thier son Benny D to success in that process.But he afraid to talk to them and tell them he don’t want to do what they want him to do he want to do his own thing he feel that they would not approve and I know his mom and she would not be happy!His mom was OSTENTATIOUS she love to show off about what her family has.She tried to DELUDE me into buying a house from them and I wasn’t having it she not going to trick me like she do other people but the house was really EDIFICE KI never saw a house that big but I still don’t want to get cheated out of my money.
I woke up bright and early, ready to explore the big city of New York. My plan for the day was to just walk down the streets of the city and see what I find. I started my adventure in times square. This is where I saw buildings with giant ANIMATIONS on the sides of them, the cartoons were being used to advertise a toy company. Others were being used to show parts of a movie that had just came out. I moved along down the street, and while I was crossing the street something caught my attention. The warm smell of bread and pastries, when I reached the window I saw a baker KNEADING some dough, so that it would be mixed together. I couldn’t help but notice that the baker could roll two doughs at the same time, one with his right, and one with his left. This baker must have been AMBIDEXTROUS. I continued on, and as i passed the EDIFICES that towered over me that. I saw a huge crowd of people, that seemed to be segregated by gender. I read one the signs from afar. I said “I deserve equal pay”, it was held by a women, i’d say they were trying to be EGALITARIAN and promote it. On the other side it was a group of men that seemed CHAUVINISTIC towards women. I didn’t want be caught up in that rally so I decided to leave before people became BERSERK on each other and sent someone to the hospital. Next I went to the bus stop where I wanted for about 20 minutes, the bus was definitely BELATED because it said it made round trips every 10 minutes. I gave up on waiting so I kept walking. I passed the shopping district and looked through some windows, in every single one I saw OSTENTATIOUS clothes that were to showy for me to wear. Finally to end my trip I stopped at a bar, and had some lunch. On the television the news was on, it was a story about Donald Trump and how he wants to give all teachers guns. The news cast seemed to be DELUDING their watchers, because everyone at the bar was agreeing with every point that the newscast made. I couldn't deal with it so i finally just went back to my hotel, to end the day. I was tired and annoyed with the city.
The wind was cold and bitter as Cardur walked to work. The tall towers above him did nothing to break the wind but instead made small tunnels for the fowl wind to claw and tear at his clothes like little fairy fingers. The massive buildings were like an edifice due to the fact that they were so huge and were so elaborately decorated with signs for clothes and items. As he walked Many people attempted to delude him and draw his attention with trinkets and small items but Cardur wasn't a very ostentatious person and saw no need to wear expensive jewelry or flashy clothes. Usually Cardur’s one objective of the day was to animate someone's day and make them feel better about themselves and others, he didn’t like that everyday was the same thing so he always liked a challenge. Cardur was not a Chauvinist he didn’t think any one person was better than any other. He was an egalitarian and thought that everyone was equal and should be equal in everything. Cardurs belief sometimes got him into trouble because he couldn't help but stand up for anyone who is being put down. As he was walking to his work Cardur noticed a woman arguing with a man in a pizzaria as he approached he noticed they were arguing over the fact that the lady was a bit belated and arrived just after the cook was closing Cardur asked the man nicely if he could just make the woman what she wanted it wouldnt take to long. After a heated argument the cook agreed to make the woman her pizza. As the cook was making the pizza he started kneading the dough so aggressively it looked like he might go berserk and rampage through the store. After the pizza was made the owner asked the woman to sign a paper but her dominant hand was full with this pizza. Luckily she was ambidextrous and could sign with her left. Cardur felt that his daily mission was completed and that he could go throughout the day in a good mood.
Last week I went to visit my Great Aunt Celeste in Miami. She told my mom and I to come down for a long weekend and of course I wanted to go and get tan ; I didn’t really want to see family. We got to the airport early but the plane was belated because of a thunderstorm so we had to sit in the airport for four hours. That was the most bored I have ever been because my phone was dead and every charger was taken. I was pretty tired because I had to wake up at 6am. When the plane was there we boarded and I fell asleep right away. I woke up to a flight attendant trying to hold back some old man going berserk in the back of the plane. He was so angry because some little boy would not stop kicking his seat .He ended up throwing is drink on the ground and punching a seat. I can see why he was made, but getting up and screaming at the kid was a bit much. I got a good four hours of sleep though, and woke up just in time. “ “We will now begin our descent to Miami,Florida.”,The flight attendants voice echoed throughout the plan. After a rough landing we finally got off the plane. The air was warm and I heard chatters of hundreds of people. Exiting the airport felt like a dream. The palm trees swayed and the sun was still out but slowing going down. I heard this loud screech from across the room. “ ADDDDDYYYY!!!!!” I knew that smokers voice from anywhere. My mom and I turned around and saw Great Aunt Celeste. She looked so ostentatious standing there in 5 inch heels, a short fur coat, long gloves, and giant sunglasses. You could just tell she was loaded. She took us out to a limo and I couldn’t believe my eyes. Desserts and snacks filled the backseat. I was starving at this point and started eating food with both hands almost as if I was ambidextrous. The limo even had a tv and I changed the channel to an animated show that I’d never seen or heard of. The limo pulled up to an edifice. It almost looked like a palace. I was stunned and didn’t know how to handle myself. We went inside and there were at least thirty men and women in aprons .It was weird to see the men baking and kneading dough and the women as butlers and caretakers. My Great Aunt Celeste is an egalitarian believes men and women can do any job. Her ex husband was a huge chauvinist . He was really rude to all the women and paid them less. I’m glad she left him. His nice guy image at the start deluded my aunt. I went up to my room and started to unpack. This is gonna be a good weekend.
I gazed upon the William’s mansion. The house was the only EDIFICE hidden within that part of the woods. Since I was a kid, I had always heard scary stories about what lay on that property. My dad always talked about the land being occupied by a pack of BERSERK wolves that would eat my face off. My mom told me stories about an AMBIDEXTROUS clown that could throw knives at me with both hands. However, their stories failed to DELUDE me; I still wanted to find the truth behind what lived on the property. My investigation had always been BELATED by a last minute homework assignment or a trip to see my grandparents. Today my schedule was completely cleared in order to find out what was in the house. Every detail of the fence that lay before me was creepy. I had made sure that my outfit was not OSTENTATIOUS, because I didn't want anyone to notice me entering the land. At first, I observed there was no angry pack of wolves or scary clowns. This ANIMATED me; I was very happy to find confirmation that my face would still be attached to my body. This relief gave me a new sense of energy as I stepped towards a window. What I found was far from my hypothesis. Instead of a decrepit room with dust, there was a kitchen with many workers. I watched as one man KNEADED dough as he formed it into the shape of a pizza, while another tossed a salad. There were only men working so I immediately assumed the boss was a CHAUVINIST. My bizarre observations were halted as my phone started to ring. It was my mom. I did not answer because I was afraid to make too much noise, however I knew this meant I had to start going home. Once I was a safe distance away from the property, my mind swarmed with questions regarding the mysterious kitchen workers. When I finally got home my mom asked me why I didn’t answer her call. Only at that moment, I remembered the time she punished my younger sister for not answering her. My mom was an EGALITARIAN. Unfortunately for me, this meant I would get the same treatment as my younger sister.
I’m working for a company where the boss is the total opposite of an EGALITARIAN. He’s giving all the promotions to the male figures in the business, and is treating them with more respect than the women. Other than that he was a huge CHAUVINIST. He likes women as friends, but then when it comes to hiring them for positions he had a hard time. It was his birthday a few days ago, I forgot to wish him one. I felt obligated to wish him a BELATED birthday. I work at a company where we have to ANIMATE videos. Before my dad passed away I saw him giving life and motion to objects that came to his mind. As soon as I saw how much joy it brought him I thought I should give it a try. As soon as I sat down I instantly fell in love and knew this was what I wanted to do for my life. This job is also made easy because I am AMBIDEXTROUS. This makes editing easier because I can use both hands to edit, instead of one. Most people have a dominant hand in which they do everything with. which mostly a person can only use one. Every day when I come into work I see my boss’s cat Henry KNEADING a blanket that is set up right at the front door. He’s basically the welcoming party for whenever you enter the office. I hate when my co-workers feel the need to show off their OSTENTATIOUS materialistic things. I feel there’s no need to show off a material just to make a point. The way my peers act you must think we live like Kings and Queens in an EDIFICE. Sometimes I feel that I just can’t take working their anymore. The last straw for me was when my boss told me about a job opportunity that made it seem perfect for me. It left that he dangled a carrot in from of me and ripped it away. They were talking me up about it and in the end, they ended up giving it to my co-worker Brandon. He completely felt the need to DELUDE me. I gave my boss my resignation letter and left. Looking back I wish I went totally BERSERK on them. They didn’t deserve for me to be nice to them. I decided to be the bigger person and leave quietly.
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DeleteKevin was a very young boy; he is eleven years old. Kevin was a very kind and polite child. He always used his manners whenever guests were over or just at a family dinner. Kevin loved his parents more than everything and his parents treated him like he was everything. His parents were extremely wealthy and humble with their money . But they did spend it how they like as well, they lived in a big EDIFICE. And sometimes Kevin's father Joseph would act a little OSTENTATIOUSLY when around other wealthy people. He loved to DELUDE them into thinking he was snobby like them but he really wasn't by wearing flashy clothes like Gucci and Prada. Furthermore he would always have a giant stack of money on him. But he was never like this at home, he would wear casual clothes usually made by gap. He did this because as a child he wasn't very popular when he was a child. All he want is the satisfactory of having friends.
ReplyDeleteJoseph traveled a lot because of his job. This made it very difficult to spend time with his family but he did try his best. Kevin loved to play tennis .He was very good at it .He wasn't like other people at the tennis courts he was very skilled and was AMBIDEXTROUS with both of his hands which made it very hard for opponents to counter his hits. He had an amazing powerful hit .Kevin loved helping his parents with everything and his birthday was coming up, and he wanted to help make his cake. He helped KNEAD the dough and bake it and decorate it. For his birthday he wanted new cleats and a soccer ball. But his father was away in Germany. His parents both agreed they would get him different things his mom would get him cleats and his father would get his a new ball. He got the cleats he asked for but his father was in Germany so he would give his present on his BELATED birthday. Joseph planned on coming home on his birthday but his flight back to Tampa, Florida . Frustrated, he went BERSERK when he found out he wouldn't be there for his son's 12th birthday. Kevin understood the situation his father was in and didn't take it personally. Needless to say he had a great day with his friends. Kevin was very interested in our society and culture he loved how people came together promoting EGALITARIAN rights and fighting for such thing. It would ANIMATE him and bring joy into his day.
Genesis is a woman who lives in Alaska. Her birthday week was approaching and her friends wanted to do something for her. She wasn’t able to celebrate her birthday on her actual birthday day because she had to finish ANIMATING things for her job but, her friends decided to throw her a BELATED birthday party in Hawaii. They wanted it to be a surprise so they DELUDED her saying they were going to take her out for dinner but they brought her to the airport.
ReplyDeleteWhen they got to Hawaii there was an EDIFICE that said “Welcome to the Aloha state”. There was a local man KNEADING fresh dough which caused the place to smell like raw dough. They could tell he was AMBIDEXTROUS because he was using both hands to write down orders. Randomly, a BERSERK guy came up to them and was chanting about how he was a CHAUVIST. Genesis was furious because he was scaring her best friends. Genesis then jumped on the guy because she is an EGALITARIAN. She goes to rallies once every month.
When all that was over, She noticed an OSTENTATIOUS mark on her shoulder that will stay permanent on her shoulder to remind her of her crazy birthday week.
One day there was a little boy named Charlie. He was a nice little boy who lived in california with his father and Grandfather. Charlie went to school one day and he got bullied by some 9th graders. When his father found out charlie was getting bullied he almost went BERSERK. Charlie had some special skills he thought that was very important he was AMBIDEXTROUS. Charlie could write with both his left and right hand. Charlie always uses his right hand to KNEAD the dough for his father's pizza restaurant. The only thing he didn't like at the restaurant is the dishwasher. People say he acts like a chauvinist pig. He thinks that women are inferior to men. Also the guys name is Pedro and he DELUDES everybody. Charlie has a sister named Jody. Her birthday was 2 days ago and he forgot to tell her happy birthday. When Charlie seen her he wished her a happy BELATED birthday. But after work Charlie took his sister to a EDIFICE, and then he took her to a museum with a OSTENTATIOUS art display. On their way back home they stopped at a ice cream shop owned by their grandparents. But when Charlie looked by the road he saw a dead bird. Since he studys a type of magic that involves bringing dead things back to life. So he picked up the dead bird and started saying some words;and finally he ANIMATED the bird. He brought the bird back to life. Later on that night their parents took them to a protest. The protest involves giving equal rights to everybody. The president made a speech and it gave EGALITARIAN. Then they all went home and partied all night and fell asleep.
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There once was a young man who lived in Scotland. His home was an EDIFICE. Most people believed it was a palace, but no king lived there. Only George lived there, who was CHAUVINIST and believed only female could be his maids. George was a very rich and every one in the town didn’t like him because he was OSTENTATIOUS. Always showing off his expensive items. He was also very depressed and lonely
ReplyDeleteOne day, a women named Mary heard about George and his beliefs on women. Mary was an EGALITARIAN. She wanted everyone to be equal. So one day she went out to George’s house with a few of her friends to protest George. One of George’s maids was KNEADING the bread dough before baking it, when she noticed Mary. The maid informed George about the intruders and he went BERSERK. He ran out to the gate at the end of this driveway with a bat and started to hit the gate to make Mary and her friends leave.
The next day, Mary goes back to George’s home but this time she doesn’t protest. She thinks she change George’s beliefs. After awhile of talking, George DELUDES Mary into giving him her phone number to talk more but really he wants to ask her on a date. Later that day, George calls Mary and asks her to go to dinner but she says no. This makes George really upset.
After a few days, George sees Mary at the market and he asks her why she didn’t want to go to dinner. She tells him that she couldn’t go because it was her birthday and she has family in town. George feels bad that he didn’t know this information, so he wishes her a BELATED birthday. Mary thanks him and says that she can go to dinner that night.
George and Mary talk for a very long time over dinner. He learns that she is AMBIDEXTROUS, which made her the best player on her softball since she could pitch with both hands. Every since their date people begin to notice George becomes more humble and ANIMATED and people began to like him more. They say love can brighten someone’s day.
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It all began with a young boy named Thaddius. Thaddius hated Donald Trump and what he would say about women, he called Trump a CHAUVINIST that just lived in his luxurious penthouse EDIFICE. So, Thaddius began his adventure of visiting Trump by climbing to the top of his shiny, golden OSTENTATIOUS tower. As he began his long journey he was thinking to himself, “I’m honestly not sure why I’m going to visit Trump, It’s not really for the EGALITARIAN protests.” Thaddius continued to ponder but changing faces he thought, “I sort of just want myself a nice perfect pie of pizza and be able to watch them KNEAD the dough too, that’s my favorite part!!” And, Thaddius could tell he was getting closer to Trump and his guarded New York City because he could smell the stringy, melted cheese of the fabled one dollar slices of pizza but Thaddius didn’t want just a slice he wanted the biggest pizza in town! He adventures to a place called Pizza Barn and got his monster slice, he even had to use his AMBIDEXTROUS skills and use both hands! As he began to climb Trump’s massive tower he sent a text to his pal Trump saying, “Coming, bro! You’re at the Trump Tower’s in NYC right?” But, Trump being Trump didn’t respond. Once he reached the top nobody was there, Thaddius was confused he thought he was BELATED but when he checked his phone again Trump responded with, “Nah fam, sorry to DELUTE you my dude.” Thaddius was so angry he went all that way to see Trump but he wasn’t there! Thaddius then went BERSERK and threw pizza he brought for Trump to try all over the windows. In the end, Thaddius won because he made millions from a cartoon he ANIMATED about this adventure!
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My elbows rest of my windowsill as I stare out at the morning sun. It must’ve been early, but I’ve been awake for a while now. Ciel, my blue parakeet, tweets at me from his cage, obviously wanting breakfast. I stretch my arms as I prepare to get up, but stop when I hear the trapdoor entrance to my room burst open.
ReplyDelete“Aspen! Get up, get up!” As my cousin shouts this, she hurtles herself at my waist, knocking me right into my window. Her small face buries itself into my shoulder, hands clinging to my sweatshirt. “You have to get up right now!”
“Cindy, you have to be more careful with Aspen, he might get hurt.” I hear Rachel’s call down from the ladder. Cindy pouts, her glasses falling down her nose. I chuckle and call back.
“I’m fine, thank you!” I return to looking at Cindy, her face ANIMATING as she clings to my waist; her light brown hair is pulled into pigtails and her hands are still clutching my sweatshirt. “What’s got you so excited today?” Cindy gets excited by the smallest of things, being eight and all, but usually she’s not as physical.
“Why aren’t you excited Aspen? It’s your birthday! Mama said she’s making pancakes!” Oh, yeah, that is a reason to be excited. With everything that’s happened in the past few months, I completely forgot. I’m glad Rachel remembered, because it would be very awkward to have a BELATED birthday party for me, especially when I’ve been here for almost 2 months. I guess I’m 15 now. I feel old.
“I’m always very excited in the morning, Cindy.” I say as I push her head away. She pops back and nods, and I rub my eyes. I’ve been trying to get up early, for top secret classified
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“I know, Mama says you’ve been getting up early to get ready for school.” My head jerks to face Cindy, wondering how she could have known this top secret information. Wait, how did Rachel know? “Mama said you’re really responsible, so I guessed that you were already getting ready. Also, this is the first time your going to high school, right?” I swear, Cindy is a superhuman. Not only is she really good at thinking about things, which is something I need to work on, she’s also AMBIDEXTROUS. I’ve seen her switch her pencil between hands while she does work, and I think I choked. That’s how you know she’s a mutant. I don’t know why she thinks I’m responsible, though.
“Well, as an older cousin, I must set a good example for you.” Maybe I’ll try to play into this ‘responsible’ image she thinks I have. Maybe she hasn’t picked up on the fact that I stopped using my crutches solely on the fact that I didn’t like how the straps looked.
“You also get up to watch the boy across the street start his jog.” She says this fact so innocently, yet I end up choking on nothing. I have many questions. First things first, how? How she knows this, how she knows that the cute boy across the street starts exercising really early, how she knows that that is the main reason why I get up. Whatever, Cindy is an omnipotent goddess who doesn’t need explanation. She probably woke up really early from a nightmare and she went to check on me. I learned that she does that by waking up with a child’s face breathing right near my bed. I think I died that night. “You think he’s handsome, right?” Cindy is too smug for her own good. I leap off of my bed into a crouch, bringing my hands up to my face in claws.
“While he may be handsome, I actually want to eat him, like how I’m going to eat you!” Cindy shrieks as she bolts off my bed in the opposite direction of me, grabbing a pillow and holding it as a shield.
“Oh no you don’t! I will destroy you before you go BERSERK you monster!” She throws the pillow she was holding, and it hits me in the face. It doesn’t hurt because she’s a third grader, but it does knock me into my desk. Living in an attic means that there’s not a lot of space, and the adults keep bumping their heads on the ceiling. Luckily I am not an adult, because I don’t know how to do taxes.
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Delete“Alright, you two, stop horsing around and get down here! I couldn’t get a day off, so I wanna see you before I go.” Both Cindy and I perk up, and she makes her way down the ladder that connects my room to the rest of the house. I take a second to give Ciel some attention and food, since he’s a very good birdie, and I jump through the trap door to the next floor. Rachel was waiting at the stairs to the first floor, Cindy was already downstairs through sheer adrenaline at the thought of pancakes. “Aspen, you have to stop jumping like that, you just got out of therapy.” I smile while shrugging. She sighs and makes her way downstairs to the dining room, and I can tell she’s frustrated about something.
ReplyDelete“Hey, are you okay?” I ask, and she sighs, placing a plate in front of me, and she sits down next to me. Cindy is too busy trying to make her pancakes a face to pay attention.
“Yeah, I’m just frustrated. My manager is making me work today because he thinks I don’t deserve the promotion I just got because of how many days I was out.” She scoffs, continuing to rant, “He’s just a CHAUVINIST, I guess, because he never treats the other cooks like this. He tells me my job is KNEADING bread when I went to college for this. It’s not like the restaurant is an EDIFICE or anything, but he treats it like people are coming to Lake Placid specifically for the restaurant.” She puts her head on the table, obviously discontent.
“That’s not cool, I mean, you have the same education as everyone else, right? It’s not right for him to treat you differently for any reason.” She chuckles, and ruffles my hair.
“Being an EGALITARIAN is a great thing to be, sweetie. Some people just don’t think of things like that.” Rachel stands up to make some coffee, and she continues, “Well, let’s not start this morning on a depressed note, now. Cindy told me you’ve been getting up early.” Oh no. I know where this is going.
“Rachel, we don’t need to talk about that right now-” she cuts me before I can continue.
“Y’know, I could introduce you to him. Cindy’s friends with his little sister.” I glare at Cindy, who by now is finally done with eating. She smugly smirks as I put my head in my hands. “I wish you were attracted to more OSTENTATIOUS people, though. Abriel’s nice but he probably won’t be able to pay your medical bills anytime soon.”
“Hey! You can’t make me DELUDE rich people just so you won’t have to pay bills.” Rachel jokes about this, but I really feel bad about having her spend so much on me. She laughs, and comes back with two mugs of coffee, one for herself and one for me.
“I’m only joking sweetie, you know I don’t mind. Happy birthday, Aspen.” She smiles sweetly, as Cindy giggles and jumps up to get something from the kitchen. Rachel whispers, “Although, I really could introduce you two. Abriel is a really nice-”
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Rain drizzled down on the world. Soaking every EDIFICE and building around Berlin. The building was so enormous, people wondered who could possibly live inside it. He was a wealthy CHAUVINIST, who hired only men for his ANIMATION studios, they made cartoon characters and brought them to life in tv show.. EDT Studios was the biggest, richest, and most powerful studio in all of Berlin. Only one man stood in his way, he was young, bright, AMBIDEXTROUS, he could use two hands and was an egalitarian, who believed that everyone should have equal rights. One day at one of the chauvinists many OSTENTATIOUS gatherings, where he would show off his wealth and power to the world, the egalitarian was there with thousands of protesters ready to peacefully combat his ideals. The believe the chauvinist wanted to DELUDE or trick them into his way of thinking. He went on about how he learned his ideals from a jewish baker who loved to KNEAD dough into different shapes and sizes in his free time. And as the people started to support him more as he continued to speak the egalitarian went BERSERK and started flipping out at the crowd. His speech was now BELATED, and he hated being late on things. The chauvinist had won first the first time and the egalitarian was not pleased.
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Benny D JR. was a nice young lad that lived in an edifice. He loved how big it was because he needed a different room for each different operator he used in R6. When it came to R6 though, he was a chauvinist. He hated using the girl operators. He only used the guys. When it came to his materialistic life though, he was very ostentatious. He had a chrome wrapped Ferrari 458 Spider, cheetah printed lambo, and a whole closet filled with Supreme and Bathing Ape. Ironically, he can't even drive yet. He’s only 16. You might be wondering, “Why will, how’d he get all his money?” Well you see, Benny D JR was an egalitarian and when he didn’t see people get treated equally, he went full berzerk and destroyed anything and everything in sight. Someone one day decided to film it an post it on youtube and he instantly became a living meme alongside the ambidextrous guy who can write super fast with both hands and Daniel with his white vans. Benny got so mad one day that he got 3 weeks in jail for trying to delude an officer. One day he smashed a huge tv at a bar that he wasn’t even allowed to be in and when the officers tried to cuff him he tried to delude them and was acting like it wasn’t him. Benny D JR likes to bake bread too. One time though, when he was mixing the dough he lost his Gucci ring and from that moment on he swore never to knead dough with jewlerly on. His worst temper tantrum was when he received a letter 3 weeks after his birthday from his friend saying happy belated birthday. His whole house was destroyed except for hi Jӓger room because he locks it for reasons like this. In that room next to the memorial for Jӓger’s acog, is his editing pc on which he’s been making an animation for the past 4 months. He’s been trying to get a show on cartoon network but we’ll see what happens if he gets rejected from that.
Who is Daniel?
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The EDIFICE stood over the forest, its extravagant architecture shining in the sun, fountains dotting the emerald green courtyard in front of it.
ReplyDelete“Happy birthday, Abby,” my mom said, staring out the window of the plane as we started to descend. It was beautiful. The trip was my BELATED birthday present, because as my birthday was only a week before summer vacation, we decided to wait to make the trip. It was worth it.
In this state the ocean could DELUDE someone into thinking that its depths were ANIMATED, as the sunlight danced on the waves, making it look alive.
Then the plane touched down on the runway, and the sight of the ocean was obscured by the large mansion that we would be staying at for the next week.
The first feelings of nervousness started to flutter in my stomach. It was my grandmother’s house, but I really only knew her name, and that she was an EGALITARIAN, which was why my CHAUVINISTIC dad couldn’t come. I didn’t need their constant arguing anyway, since my grandmother would stand up for everybody and talk about equal rights, and my dad would just be racist for a whole seven days.
Don’t get me wrong, I’m all for equal rights, but that’s a bit much. Of course, this is all just guesswork, considering I’ve never actually met her; I’d compiled some articles about her before we came, and while she doesn’t seem to be OSTENTATIOUS in them, her showy house would suggest otherwise, and I’m already rethinking what little I know about her.
Half an hour later we’d thanked the pilot (that flew us here in my grandmother’s personal plane) and started the walk back to the house, dragging our luggage behind us.
When we reached the house, she was in the kitchen waiting for us, KNEADING dough for bread until it was shaped perfectly. From the smell, one loaf was already in the oven, giving the place the smell of home. This is what my mom makes, I realized suddenly.
However, that epiphany did nothing to dispel the awkwardness as I stood there, feeling like I was intruding into someone’s home. Both women seemed to realize it too, as my mom introduced me to her mom and then suggested we find our rooms.
And of course, being me, as I rounded the corner, I ran right into a stranger. I didn’t even have time to think about it as she then got pushed into a table, which unfortunately had an expensive looking vase on it.
And I watched, almost in slow motion, as the vase flew off the table. But to my surprise, and luck, she caught it with lightning quick reflexes before it could shatter. I briefly wondered if she was AMBIDEXTROUS, since she caught it with her left hand but had a pencil tucked over her right ear, which made it look as if she had equal skill level with both hands.
My curiosity quickly faded however as the look of shock morphed into anger on her face. I thought she was going to go BERSERK and throw something at me, but the anger faded in under a second into a neutral look that I couldn’t quite read. This was going to be an interesting week.
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DeleteOnce upon a time there was this boy name Benny D Sr. He was a good kid. As a child he always had a smile on his face and was always nice to people.He was also creative. This one time he went to his cousin’s house after the day of her birthday. He told her happy BELATED birthday and made a ANIMATED cartoon for her It was a cool cartoon that was made. It’s like he almost perfect he’s AMBIDEXTROUS it’s crazy how he can use both hands for everything.When I saw him we went out to the grocery store and buy things to make pizza.Benny said we should KNEAD the dough and make it by scratch and it was fun my first time I ever made pizza.When he got older he wanted to grow up and start a buisness and he said he won’t let women work that because they can’t handle it so he CHAUVINIST.He believed in EGALITARIAN he believes that thing between people should be equal but he wouldn’t risk for women to do heavy equipment work he would have to be in the office.He was just telling me how he would run things.His mom would go BERSERK if he doesn’t follow after his dad footsteps.His dad was a Lawyer for criminal justice and retired Ten years ago.Now they want thier son Benny D to success in that process.But he afraid to talk to them and tell them he don’t want to do what they want him to do he want to do his own thing he feel that they would not approve and I know his mom and she would not be happy!His mom was OSTENTATIOUS she love to show off about what her family has.She tried to DELUDE me into buying a house from them and I wasn’t having it she not going to trick me like she do other people but the house was really EDIFICE KI never saw a house that big but I still don’t want to get cheated out of my money.
ReplyDeleteI woke up bright and early, ready to explore the big city of New York. My plan for the day was to just walk down the streets of the city and see what I find. I started my adventure in times square. This is where I saw buildings with giant ANIMATIONS on the sides of them, the cartoons were being used to advertise a toy company. Others were being used to show parts of a movie that had just came out. I moved along down the street, and while I was crossing the street something caught my attention. The warm smell of bread and pastries, when I reached the window I saw a baker KNEADING some dough, so that it would be mixed together. I couldn’t help but notice that the baker could roll two doughs at the same time, one with his right, and one with his left. This baker must have been AMBIDEXTROUS. I continued on, and as i passed the EDIFICES that towered over me that. I saw a huge crowd of people, that seemed to be segregated by gender. I read one the signs from afar. I said “I deserve equal pay”, it was held by a women, i’d say they were trying to be EGALITARIAN and promote it. On the other side it was a group of men that seemed CHAUVINISTIC towards women. I didn’t want be caught up in that rally so I decided to leave before people became BERSERK on each other and sent someone to the hospital. Next I went to the bus stop where I wanted for about 20 minutes, the bus was definitely BELATED because it said it made round trips every 10 minutes. I gave up on waiting so I kept walking. I passed the shopping district and looked through some windows, in every single one I saw OSTENTATIOUS clothes that were to showy for me to wear. Finally to end my trip I stopped at a bar, and had some lunch. On the television the news was on, it was a story about Donald Trump and how he wants to give all teachers guns. The news cast seemed to be DELUDING their watchers, because everyone at the bar was agreeing with every point that the newscast made. I couldn't deal with it so i finally just went back to my hotel, to end the day. I was tired and annoyed with the city.
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Cobane Bissonette
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English 10
March 6,2018
The wind was cold and bitter as Cardur walked to work. The tall towers above him did nothing to break the wind but instead made small tunnels for the fowl wind to claw and tear at his clothes like little fairy fingers. The massive buildings were like an edifice due to the fact that they were so huge and were so elaborately decorated with signs for clothes and items. As he walked Many people attempted to delude him and draw his attention with trinkets and small items but Cardur wasn't a very ostentatious person and saw no need to wear expensive jewelry or flashy clothes. Usually Cardur’s one objective of the day was to animate someone's day and make them feel better about themselves and others, he didn’t like that everyday was the same thing so he always liked a challenge. Cardur was not a Chauvinist he didn’t think any one person was better than any other. He was an egalitarian and thought that everyone was equal and should be equal in everything. Cardurs belief sometimes got him into trouble because he couldn't help but stand up for anyone who is being put down. As he was walking to his work Cardur noticed a woman arguing with a man in a pizzaria as he approached he noticed they were arguing over the fact that the lady was a bit belated and arrived just after the cook was closing Cardur asked the man nicely if he could just make the woman what she wanted it wouldnt take to long. After a heated argument the cook agreed to make the woman her pizza. As the cook was making the pizza he started kneading the dough so aggressively it looked like he might go berserk and rampage through the store. After the pizza was made the owner asked the woman to sign a paper but her dominant hand was full with this pizza. Luckily she was ambidextrous and could sign with her left. Cardur felt that his daily mission was completed and that he could go throughout the day in a good mood.
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Eliza Barney
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3/6/18
Last week I went to visit my Great Aunt Celeste in Miami. She told my mom and I to come down for a long weekend and of course I wanted to go and get tan ; I didn’t really want to see family. We got to the airport early but the plane was belated because of a thunderstorm so we had to sit in the airport for four hours. That was the most bored I have ever been because my phone was dead and every charger was taken. I was pretty tired because I had to wake up at 6am. When the plane was there we boarded and I fell asleep right away. I woke up to a flight attendant trying to hold back some old man going berserk in the back of the plane. He was so
angry because some little boy would not stop kicking his seat .He ended up throwing is drink on the ground and punching a seat. I can see why he was made, but getting up and screaming at the kid was a bit much. I got a good four hours of sleep though, and woke up just in time. “
“We will now begin our descent to Miami,Florida.”,The flight attendants voice echoed throughout the plan.
After a rough landing we finally got off the plane. The air was warm and I heard chatters of hundreds of people. Exiting the airport felt like a dream. The palm trees swayed and the sun was still out but slowing going down. I heard this loud screech from across the room.
“ ADDDDDYYYY!!!!!”
I knew that smokers voice from anywhere. My mom and I turned around and saw Great Aunt Celeste. She looked so ostentatious standing there in 5 inch heels, a short fur coat, long gloves, and giant sunglasses. You could just tell she was loaded. She took us out to a limo and I couldn’t believe my eyes. Desserts and snacks filled the backseat. I was starving at this point and started eating food with both hands almost as if I was ambidextrous. The limo even had a tv and I changed the channel to an animated show that I’d never seen or heard of. The limo pulled up to an edifice. It almost looked like a palace. I was stunned and didn’t know how to handle myself. We went inside and there were at least thirty men and women in aprons .It was weird to see the men baking and kneading dough and the women as butlers and caretakers. My Great Aunt Celeste is an egalitarian believes men and women can do any job. Her ex husband was a huge chauvinist . He was really rude to all the women and paid them less. I’m glad she left him. His nice guy image at the start deluded my aunt. I went up to my room and started to unpack. This is gonna be a good weekend.
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I gazed upon the William’s mansion. The house was the only EDIFICE hidden within that part of the woods. Since I was a kid, I had always heard scary stories about what lay on that property. My dad always talked about the land being occupied by a pack of BERSERK wolves that would eat my face off. My mom told me stories about an AMBIDEXTROUS clown that could throw knives at me with both hands. However, their stories failed to DELUDE me; I still wanted to find the truth behind what lived on the property. My investigation had always been BELATED by a last minute homework assignment or a trip to see my grandparents. Today my schedule was completely cleared in order to find out what was in the house.
ReplyDeleteEvery detail of the fence that lay before me was creepy. I had made sure that my outfit was not OSTENTATIOUS, because I didn't want anyone to notice me entering the land. At first, I observed there was no angry pack of wolves or scary clowns. This ANIMATED me; I was very happy to find confirmation that my face would still be attached to my body. This relief gave me a new sense of energy as I stepped towards a window. What I found was far from my hypothesis. Instead of a decrepit room with dust, there was a kitchen with many workers. I watched as one man KNEADED dough as he formed it into the shape of a pizza, while another tossed a salad. There were only men working so I immediately assumed the boss was a CHAUVINIST.
My bizarre observations were halted as my phone started to ring. It was my mom. I did not answer because I was afraid to make too much noise, however I knew this meant I had to start going home. Once I was a safe distance away from the property, my mind swarmed with questions regarding the mysterious kitchen workers. When I finally got home my mom asked me why I didn’t answer her call. Only at that moment, I remembered the time she punished my younger sister for not answering her. My mom was an EGALITARIAN. Unfortunately for me, this meant I would get the same treatment as my younger sister.